In part two, you give an excellent response with regard to the 'common people'. However, you fail to identify and explain the alternatives that Mac gives -- nobility, army, etc -- and therefore your argument seems light. Always give all points of view first; lay them out like you were setting them out on a table. Then go through and pick apart each one. Finally, choose the one you think is best and explain why. This scenario makes your argument more complete.
In part two, you give an excellent response with regard to the 'common people'. However, you fail to identify and explain the alternatives that Mac gives -- nobility, army, etc -- and therefore your argument seems light. Always give all points of view first; lay them out like you were setting them out on a table. Then go through and pick apart each one. Finally, choose the one you think is best and explain why. This scenario makes your argument more complete.
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ReplyDeleteHere are the original presentation critiques (pre-edit): http://jcapeh.blogspot.com/2010/10/presentation-critiques.html